Speech 4 Outline

For speech number four my group is taking an abandoned hardware store and making it into a Fun Zone for kids. The store is in Carpentaria and is big enough to accommodate many different  activities. We are planning on putting in a rock wall with a foam pitt at the base, bowling, lazier tag, and two rooms for rent. The building is is going to be called the “dump” and is intended to be for kids who are in their mid-teens. The speech will consist of the creator trying to convince investors to put money into the project. 

McCool: CEO

McCool will try an appeal to the investors by describing  the need for the dump and how it will influence the community for the better. She will describe the “dump” in detail and then explain the financial aspect. 

Me: Investor

I will be an investor who probably has a background in construction. I will be asking McCool question in order for her to bring up more facts about “the dump”, and land on more subjects.

March: Investor

March will be another Investor who has a different background than I do. This will make it easier for McCool to answer more questions and bring up different subjects. 

Jimenez: Teenager,Mother,Citizen

Sarah will be playing three different rolls to show diverse opinion in the community. Her role as a teenager will show that she doesn’t have a lot to do in the town so “the Dump” would be a great place to hang out. As a mother she will explain that this new fun zone will help her kid to stay out of trouble. As a citizen she will bring up the rock climbing wall and say that it is the only access someone like them has to that equipment.

The design of our Prezi is in the form of a Blue Print and will show the layout of “The Dump”. 

The research that we have to do will encompass many aspects. 

• The driving distance between Santa Barbara and Carpentaria. This will show the Lack of activities that kids in Carpentaria have access too.
• Crime rates in Carpanteria caused by the Youth. 
• Vandillism reports
• Cost of Land
• Cost of equipment
• Rent Cost

Start, stop, continue. Speech 3

Start

The next speech that I give needs more preparation. I wanted to do a more complex topic for speech number three, but I didn’t give myself enough time. When I did speech number two I had a good amount of preparation time and was able to give a presentation that I was proud of. When I prepared for this speech I gave myself as much time to prepare as I did with the second one. This was a mistake. 

Another thing that I would like to start doing is to make sure that I cite my sources for my prezi. I didn’t mention any of my sources when I was talking to the class, even though I used many examples of execution methods from history. It makes me feel like my speech lacked credibility, even though the examples were historically accurate. 

The next thing that I wan’t to focus on more is the way I present myself to the class. When I did speech two I moved around a lot, which made me more engaging to the audience. Unfortunately, for speech three I mostly stood by the computer. This was clearly not as entertaining for the class and did not command attention as it should have. 

During my practice of speech three I failed to end it on the same time consistently. Sometimes I would fall under the time limit and sometimes I would be over the limit. When I actually gave the presentation the the class, I wen’t one minute over the four minute limit. I don’t really know how this happened, but in the future I would very much like to end when I am supposed too. 

I felt that the topic I was giving was of some importance and I needed a strong finish to make my point. The problem I faced with my speech was that I didn’t feel like a gave a strong closing statement. I really wanted to craft my words in a way that would make people think, but instead I jumbled my words around so much that what I said didn’t really seem to stick. I n the the next speech I really wan’t to be able to make a strong well crafted closing statement. 

Stop:

 For speech number four I would really like to stop looking so uncomfortable when I am talking. I don’t really look natural when I am up there and I feel like it takes away from the presentation. 

Another thing that I would like to stop is my use of “um”. Especially when I am doing a topic that is of importance. I feel that it makes me sound unintelligent and doesn’t give me credibility when talking about my subject. 

I also want to stop looking at the power point so much when I talk. Speech number two went pretty well, but I felt that for speech number three I was back to looking at the computer. When ever I put to much focus on the computer I end up speaking very mechanically, which brings me to my next point. For speech number three I would like to stop speaking so monotoned. My voice really didn’t change pitch throughout the presentation, so it made for a very boring five minutes. 

Continue:

I would like to continue giving speeches that have interest to me. I really liked the topic that I chose to talk about, and felt that it is something that should be addressed. This is something that I feel all speeches should have, because most of the time the one speaking will do a better job.

I would also like to continue speaking directly to my audience and really scan the room. This made me look less nervous and helped to engage more with the audience. I didn’t just stick to one side of the room as I often do. 

Another thing that I would like to continue is opening up with another strong opening statement. I feel that it helped me to engage with the class and keep people interested even though they may not have liked the rest. 

Ryan Fotchman: I felt that Ryan gave a good speech because of the way he focused his prison sweatshop topic on bringing manufacturing back to the U.S. I felt like it was a creative way of making a controversial subject more appealing. 

Conner Thompson: I liked when he threw the change onto the table. It kept me very interested in his speech and made it more fun to watch. Thats something that I wouldn’t think to do. 

Nick: Nicks presentation was funny and I thought he made his point more credible when he showed the video of the size of the universe.